Six Sentence Sunday 5/13

From Acceptance: One Man’s Quest

Background – Alex left home over fifteen years ago and has not seen his two children since. Their mother was killed in an accident and they all have just learned Alex has full guardianship of the kids. 

At this point Jamie jumped to his feet, “I am not going to change schools in the middle of my senior year of high school and move halfway across the country to live with two God-damned cock-sucking faggots.”

Pop, Andrew, and Alex all stood up and Pop bellowed out, “James Michael!”

At the same time, Andrew said, “You don’t want to live with us, well I’m not so sure I want your homophobic little ass in my house.”

***
Alex turned to Andrew, “Andrew, sit down and don’t say another word, I’ll handle things.” He pointed his finger at Pop, “You, too, Pop.”

Pop bellowed, “Don’t tell me what to do!”

 

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7 responses to “Six Sentence Sunday 5/13

  1. Looking forward to reading it

  2. This is an early comment but I just wanted to say “Thank You” to everyone for letting me be included in your Hop Against Homophobia. I am afraid I am not a talented m/m fiction writer like yourself but I am an avid reader of it.

    I guess I do not fit into any category really since I write non-fiction for an adult gay studio.
    http://shadowsterling.blogspot.com/2012/04/studio-i-write-for.html

    But this is a cause I feel strongly about and I wanted to let you know I appreciate the opportunity to be included.

    I put a post up at the top of my blog on May 5th and it will remain up until May 19th. http://shadowsterling.blogspot.com/2012/05/straights-and-international-day-against.html

    Since I do not write books I will be donating money to PFLAG here in the U.S. in the name of the winner.

    Thank you again for the inclusion.

  3. I like the subject matter and as the reader I’m hoping that Jamie goes on a journey to discover the roots of his homophobia. I want to see him get turned around and set straight (or not, ha ha) and I think that could make for an interesting read. As for these sentences, I found them a bit confusing and I read them a few times to try and figure out why. I think it’s because of all the names! See if you can take out at least half of them and I think it will read much more smoothly. For example, “They all stood up and Pop bellowed…” This is less cumbersome and if I’m reading the whole story, I’ll know who “they” are.

    • The roots of Jamie’s homophobia lie in Pop (his grandfather) who declared his son was dead when he found out Alex was gay. Jamie comes around a lot faster than Pop does.

      As to the people – I couldn’t say ‘all’ because there are about 10 more people in the room.

  4. Sounds like Alex has got one heck of a road ahead.

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